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In the flush of love's light, we dare be brave. And suddenly we see that love costs all we are, and will ever be. Yet it is only love which sets us free.

Maya Angelou

"The Light of Love" is the titled of my first book of short stories, which I am currently in the process of writing.

It refers to the morning star, the planet Venus, which the main character, Dee Dee O'Donnell, 22, calls it.

She is at a local night club on a Saturday Night in October. She is alone, drinking rum and cokes, at the bar.

She is invited by a young man, Dennis O'Day, to join him in celebrating his birthday and drink Champaign provided by the club because its his 21st birthday and he is legal. She agrees.

They drink all night and she asks him to drive her home. He agrees and drives her. When they arrive at her apartment building she invites him to her apartment for a cup of coffee. He agrees

They go up to her apartment and have coffee and conversation. He tells her that he just got out of the Navy and is joining the Electricians Union. She tells him that she had just graduated from college and is now the assistant manager at a local branch of Bank of America.

He asks her if she wants to make love. She says yes and tells him that it will be her first time and asks him to be gentle. They spend the rest of the early morning in bed and after making love the both fall in love with each other.

I won't go into any more details right now. I'll continue in the next post.

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Dennis left at dawn around 6:00. Dee Dee was too excited to sleep so she made herself a cup of coffee. She sat down at the table and thought about Dennis and last night.

She would have to tell her mother, who would be happy for her because she had waited till she fell in love. Dee Dee remembered that she was having supper there tonight to celebrate her brothers fifth wedding anniversary. Dee Dees was in the mood to celebrate so she would enjoy it. She would have to call her later this morning and tell her.

She would also have to call her girlfriend Sue and tell her that she finally had her first affair and lost her virginity. Sue would be envious because she was still a virgin but hated herself for it.

Dee Dee thought about all of this but she had Dennis on her mind and last nights love making. She thought it was beautiful. She remembered how gentle Dennis was and how it felt in his arms and when they kissed. She wanted so bad to do it again.

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Dee Dee got up from the table and went over to the window. The Sun was shining through the blinds. She opened the blinds and the sky was clear blue without a cloud. She was in a very happy mood.

She left the blinds open and went to the closet and changed her clothes. She put on a Navy skirt and a blue pin-striped blouse. She looked at her scarves and chose the one that was baby blue.

Dee Dee looked at the clock and it was only 9:00. It was still too early to call her mother and her girlfriend Sue. She went back in the kitchen and made herself another cup of coffee. She sat down at the table and thought of Dennis and their future together.

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Dee Dee looked at the clock and it was 10:00. She called her mother and told her about Dennis and last night's affair, how they fell in love.

Her mother said she was very happy for her and Dennis. She reminded Dee Dee about tonight's supper to celebrate her brother's and Karen's fifth wedding anniversary.

Dee Dee said she remembered and would be there early.

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After finishing talking with her mother, Dee Dee called her girlfriend Sue and told her about last night's love affair and how she had lost her virginity.

Sue told Dee Dee that she was very happy for her and at the same time she was envious because she was still a virgin and she hated herself for it. Dee Dee tried to console her by sayin her time will come soon enough.

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After she finished talking to Sue, Dee Dee was feeling pretty good.

She looked at the clock and it was quarter to 11. She decided to make herself another cup of coffee and watch the local news on TV. After she made the cup of coffee, Dee Dee sat down at the table and turned on the TV with the remote.

The TV was on but Dee Dee only had Dennis on her mind. When would she see him again and be held in his arms and kiss her. He had her phone number and said he would call this afternoon. She was excited and couldn't wait.

The TV news broke its monotony to report an exclusive. Dee Dee perked up and she was all eyes and ears.

There was an early morning crash involving two men at the intersection of Quail and New Scotland. Both men were taken to Albany Medical Center for treatment.

According to an eye witness at the scene a Volkswagen driven by O'Day was traveling up New Scotland when a Chrysler driven by Steward darted out of Quail Street, running the red light, across New Scotland. According to the eye witness the Volkswagen hit the Chrysler broadside.

The driver of the Volkswagen was identified as Dennis O'Day of Lakewood Avenue. The driver of the Chrysler was identified as Henry Stewart of Quail Street. The Police are investigating.

According to the latest report from Albany Medical Center, O'Day was dead on arrival and Stewart is listed as being in serious condition.

Dee Dee was in shock. She kept repeating "dead on arrival", "dead on arrival", "dead on arrival". She would never see Dennis again.

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Dee Dee was feeling a little better now, but she figured she still have to work out this tragedy in he head.

She went to the window and closed the blinds. Then she went to her closet and changed her clothes. Dee Dee put on a pair of black slacks and a Navy blue flannel shirt, She got out a pair of black flats and put them on. Now she felt more comfortable.

Dee Dee made herself a cup of coffee and sat down at the table. She had Dennis on her mind.

She wanted to stay alone in solitude for the rest of the day.

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That's such a touching story, dear.

Good for Dee Dee! She lost her virginity to some silly drip, and couldn't wait to tell the world about it. Then she learns that her drip had died. She was in shock!

But in the very next paragraph, she's already feeling a little better. But what makes her really feel better is a fresh change of clothes! What gal can resist the allure of black slacks, a navy-blue flannel shirt, and black flats? For a woman, nice clothes will always turn that frown upside down, even when your silly drip of a lover has been killed in a car accident.

I suppose it's the same for whores, dear. If a man happens to stick his "thing" inside of her without a rubber, and the silly whore discovers this after the fact, why then, if she freaks out, just tell her to put on some nice new clothes and grab a cup of coffee and turn that frown upside down!
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I must say, that Dee Dee sure does drink a shitload* of coffee.

Flo prefers whiskey.

As to "black flats," never. Flo prefers prudent patent-leather pumps purchased at PayLess.

*Pardon Flo's French
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Dear, in the spirit of constructive criticism, I’ve decided to tinker with your story, and explore alternate plotlines and endings. Please take this in the spirit intended.

ALTERNATE ENDING NO. 1

Dee Dee is at a local night club on a Saturday Night in October. She is alone, drinking rum and cokes, at the bar.

She is invited by a young man, Dennis O'Day, to join him in celebrating his birthday and drink Champaign [SIC] provided by the club because its [SIC] his 21st birthday and he is legal. She agrees.

They drink all night and she asks him to drive her home. He agrees and drives her. In the car he thinks: Bwa-ha-ha! Some poon for me! :muahaha: Not only that: because I’m an Individual, I won’t use a condom. If later on a bun pops out of the oven, it will be a complete surprise! Only the best for Denny O’Day! Bwa-ha-ha! :muahaha:

Unfortunately, because dear Dennis has been drinking all night, he is as drunk as fuck.* Just before reaching Dee Dee’s apartment, Dennis wraps his car around a telephone pole at high speed, and both dear Dee Dee and Dennis are instantly killed.

This is especially tragic because Dee Dee will no longer be consoled of life’s tragedies by putting on trendy and fashionable clothes. However, in accordance with the stipulations of her will, she is interred wearing blacks slacks, black flats and a navy-blue flannel shirt. Now she felt more comfortable, even though she was as dead as FUCK** THE END.

*Pardon Flo’s French

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That's much too tragic.

Dee Dee is a woman of courage and has a lot of future to face.
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I like donuts.
Donuts are much too fattening for me.
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You can have one donut. Can't you have a donut?
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You can have one donut. Can't you have a donut?
I have eaten donuts as recently as early October when I ate a couple of apple cider donuts, my favorite. But I decided not to eat donuts again as they are not vegan.
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[QUOTE=bobsavegan;1242852]Dee Dee was feeling a little better now, but she figured she still have to work out this tragedy in he head.

She went to the window and closed the blinds. Then she went to her closet and changed her clothes. Dee Dee put on a pair of black slacks and a Navy blue flannel shirt, She got out a pair of black flats and put them on. Now she felt more comfortable.

Dee Dee made herself a cup of coffee and sat down at the table. She had Dennis on her mind.

She wanted to stay alone in solitude for the rest of the day.

Here's a slight revision...

Dee Dee looked at the clock and it was 11 thirty, she figured she still have to work out this tragedy in her head.

She went to the window and closed the blinds. Then she went to her closet and changed her clothes. Dee Dee put on a pair of black slacks and a Navy blue flannel shirt, she got out a pair of black flats and put them on. Now she felt more comfortable and started to feel better.

Dee Dee made herself a cup of coffee and sat down at the table. She had Dennis on her mind.

She wanted to stay alone in solitude for the rest of the day.
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Let me add to your story, dear:

Later, Dee Dee discovered that she was pregnant, and that she had a vile STD, because dear Dennis had neglected to use a condom, since he was a Free Spirit, an Individual in the transports of EROS, with nary a thought for the morrow. That is the best kind of individual to be: someone who does not believe in contraception or abortion.

Dee Dee wanted to have an abortion, but she lived in the South, and the local Tea Party terrorized her into having the child. Her pastor counseled her thus: “Just imagine if a Great Man like Ronald Reagan had been aborted. Where would this country be today, if He had never been President? Your child may also become a Great Man like Massah Reagan.”

So Dee Dee had the child, a boy. She named him Diablo.

At age 16, Diablo robbed a liquor store at gunpoint. Hearing the news of his arrest, Didi closed the blinds on her window. Then she went to her closet and changed her clothes. Dee Dee put on a pair of black slacks and a Navy blue flannel shirt. She got out a pair of black flats and put them on. Now she felt more comfortable.

Dee Dee made herself her 50th cup of coffee of the day and sat down at the table. She had Diablo on her mind.

She wanted to stay alone in solitude for the rest of the day.

Years later, after Diablo was paroled, he confronted his mother: “God!” he roared. “I fucking* HATE black slacks, Navy-blue flannel shirts and black flats!” He cut his mother’s throat with a carving knife, sawing down through the spine and decapitating her. Afterward, he moved to Syria and joined ISIS. Hearing this news, his dead mother wanted to grab another cuppa Joe, but she couldn’t, because she was as DEAD AS FUCK.** THE END. :sadcheer:

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Dee Dee was sitting at the table thinking about Dennis when she remembered her Grandmother’s words. Her Grandmother used to say to her that “Love is beautiful. When there is Love in the heart there is hope in the future.”

Also, every chance she got she used to say to Dee Dee “Have Courage, take a chance on Love.”

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Dee Dee was sitting at the table thinking about Dennis when she remembered her Grandmother’s words. Her Grandmother used to say to her that “Love is beautiful. When there is Love in the heart there is hope in the future.”

Also, every chance she got she used to say to Dee Dee “Have Courage, take a chance on Love.”

In fact, her grandmother said this to Dee Dee so many times, that one day Dee Dee finally lost her shit. :shit: She yelled at her grandmother: “SHUT THE BLUE FUCK UP WITH YOUR ENDLESS INANE PLATITUDES, YOU SIMPERING HAG! If you MUST endlessly repeat these banalities and clichés, why don’t you go post them to a message board like the Free-Thought Forum and leave me the shit alone!” :freakout:
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All this flirting is embarrassing me.
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Her Grandmother never tired of telling Dee Dee about how her mother had been born.

The way she told it Dee Dee’s Grandmother had a love affair with this soldier. They fell in Love with each other and became engaged.

Then the soldier got orders to go overseas to be involved in the D-Day invasion at Normandy. He was killed in battle and buried at Normandy with a white cross as his grave marker.

She became pregnant and gave birth to Dee Dee’s mother. She raised her by herself and showered her with Love.
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Her Grandmother never tired of telling Dee Dee about how her mother had been born.

She told the story again and again again and again again and again again and again again and again again and again again and again again and again again and again again and again again and again again and again again and again again and again again and again again and again again and again again and again.

Finally Dee Dee snapped.

With a carving knife, Dee Dee slit grandmother right up through the stomach, the way that one might gut a freshly caught fish. Then Dee chopped Gradma up into little bits, and put the bits into a blender, along with some strawberries and bananas. Dee Dee made Grandma Smoothies. She drank one, and then put the rest in the refrigerator for later. Now she would never again have to hear about that goddamned white cross.

Dee Dee was feeling a little better. She put on a pair of black slacks and a Navy blue flannel shirt. She got out a pair of black flats and put them on. Now she felt more comfortable. Of course she also poured herself another cup of coffee, though the coffee didn't have any grandma bits in it.

Years later, of course, Dee Dee’s own son, Diablo, would murder her mother in a similar horrible way, :stab: but instead of gutting his mother, he decapitated her. Also, he didn’t make smoothies out of her corpse.

Grandma’s death is an example of “foreshadowing” in fictive literature, and perhaps “irony” as well.
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Dear Flo,

You are always trying to kill off the characters or end the story.

The way I have it planned the characters live a long time and it is a long way to till the ending. There will be many more surprises!!
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Dee Dee was now in a very good mood after thinking of her Grandmother. It took her mind off of Dennis and his tragedy.

She went over to the window and opened the blinds to let the sunshine in. Then she went to the closet to change her clothes again. This time they would be more festive.

She looked at her wardrobe and chose a lavender skirt and a pair of black tights. She put those on and wondered what kind of blouse she should wear.
She looked at herself in the full-length mirror. First off she decided to take off her bra. Then she chose an orchid blouse with stripes. Finally, she chose a rainbow scarf.

Now she was ready for tonight’s celebration.

She looked at the clock and it was 2 twenty. In another hour she would go to her mother’s.

Dee Dee went over to her stereo and put a cd of Dizzy Gillespie in it. He was always good for festive moods. She sat down in the lounger and listened

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